Vall.Grey poetry12 Comments on A complex disease (part 1)

A complex disease (part 1)

a mood board containing pictures about a complex disease
 An old man’s sweat
 That is how they smelled
 the days of our life
 A sludge that never got out
 a grey one 
  
 That is how they tasted
 the last days of our life
 That is the flavor of a long weep
 a brainstorm
  
 The wicked hollers, the cries
 The unknown feelings of suffer
 They get close to me
 As a doppelgänger of sulfur
  
 They smile as I smile
                                            as I wonder in despair
                                            as I look into their eyes
  
 Petrified as I stack in their mess
 A façade of the old days
                                            the deadpan days, the blurry ones
                                            and they bite constantly
                                            and they smell of the fatal seed
  
 *
  
 The One will bring the Gore
  
 One of me half alive in the Hole
  
 May One bring primal Destruction
  
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12 thoughts on “A complex disease (part 1)”

  1. Little Charmer February 26, 2021 — 12:59 am

    Brutal.
    But brilliant.
    🖤🖤

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      1. Little Charmer February 26, 2021 — 11:44 pm

        You’re so welcome 🖤

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  2. Michele Lee February 26, 2021 — 4:54 am

    Your last line, actually the last two words, summarize this poem so perfectly.
    I could not stop reading these lines~
    “That is the flavor of a long weep
    a brainstorm”
    I haven’t had a long weep in a long time. I am probably overdue, but I immediately was reminded of the taste of this experience. Salty, honest, cleansing, real, human…
    I also love the use of the word “brainstorm” – creative play with words.
    👏👏👏

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      Vall.Grey poetry February 26, 2021 — 8:15 pm

      Thank you so much, Michele… Your supporting words are always precious to me.💖🙏🏻

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      1. Michele Lee February 26, 2021 — 8:24 pm

        You are welcome. Always a pleasure reading your work. I only wish I could read your poems in both of your languages. 😀

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  4. BINNZYtheWRITER March 4, 2021 — 9:16 pm

    Thanks for showing some love. Will definitely check out some of you work

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      Vall.Grey poetry March 4, 2021 — 9:24 pm

      Thank you so much!✨🙏🏻 You seem to write from the heart too… Will read more of your work too 😊🖤

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  5. BINNZYtheWRITER March 5, 2021 — 12:32 am

    The only way i know haha. Let the journey begin haha. Great work by the way. I can definitely feel the feels haha

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